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6:07 A.M by ~vagabondtrv:iconvagabondtrv:

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6:07 A.M

           he stands
           the pulse of an acid sun
           lucid like he never grew up
                      and the blanket is not on his
                          bed
                      (and the reason)

           the reasons why—
           a chewed up poet in those
ugly gray snakers—
           he could be the reasons
                      why.

           I pulled a fast one
           bright like a bellyache in the chill
                      morning air
                      little girl with the notebook in
                      her hand, the bad skin
                      and the
           begin again.

           he looked my way
           and I started to
                            relearn how to breathe.
           the impact of starburst eyes
               (and the reasons why)
           it is too damn early
                      this morning.
©2005-2009 ~vagabondtrv
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Author's Comments

A semi-long poem, lordy.

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~cULToFoNE Dec 10, 2005, 7:52:55 AM
yES. bOOTIfULL.

'lucid like he never grew up'

tHASS aN aMASIN LiNE.

--
"we are all giants, raised by pigmies, who have learned to walk with a perpetual mental crouch."
-robert anton wilson.
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~Sweet-Orb-Mace Jan 9, 2006, 4:14:12 AM
6:07am is too early in the morning for anything. I like the line 'bright like bellyache'. And congratulations on the Unknown Artists selection, by the way. :)
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~Gardain Jan 9, 2006, 4:39:34 AM
thats just beatiful. Though i really feel like a retarted due to fact i have nothing else to say, İ just feel it wont matter.
Just know that this was beatifull.

--
There are so many different worlds.
So many different suns
And We have just one world,
But we live in different ones...
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~yuppy64 Jan 9, 2006, 5:22:55 AM
You've used great language and structure to make the a very stand out poem!
Great choice of words.

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Ha
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~BaneTUH Jan 9, 2006, 5:58:27 AM
Hmmm...its strange a good poem that was selected in the unknown artist thing or whatever only got 4 comments... anyway, there seems to be some unneccesary pauses, it seems, but that's all. Most pauses seem ok though.

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~irukandji Jan 9, 2006, 6:03:32 AM
I loved your style and meanings... It truly is a beautiful poem. Well written and even better imagery!

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~zebrazebrazebra Jan 9, 2006, 6:26:53 AM
Well, the article's only been up a few hours. ;P Give it time!
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*TheMockingBird Jan 9, 2006, 9:37:03 AM
I am sooo in love with this!! :glomp: It's amazing! Total :+fav:

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Raoul: "You said yourself...He's just a man."
Erica: "But Ohh WHAT a man!"

~:jsenn:
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~animewritergirl Jan 9, 2006, 9:45:50 AM
I liked this poem I agree that there are some pauses that are unnecessary but it was good all the same:)

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animewritergirl
It's not the fame itself that makes you famous but what you do with it that does.
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